Eyes wide opened,
Burning; Dry.
Eyes left opened,
Please don’t cry.

I stay awake for you.
I pray all night for you.
Please don’t give up,
I wonder what you do.

Eyes burning; Hot,
Pain so ever lasting.
Eyes are burning badly,
Colors too contrasting.

I wonder how you are,
I’m scared you’ll go too far.
Please don’t let it win,
You don’t need another scar.

Eyes close, now, lightly.
Afraid to close them tight.
Eyes close, now, slowly.
I’m afraid for you tonight.

I can’t bear the thought,
Of what you think you’re not.
Please don’t buy the lies,
These battles must be fought.

Eyes now shut in fear,
Twitching ever so.
Eyes now shut in rest,
I pray that you let go.

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About Robin Elizabeth

My name is Robin Elizabeth and I'm 21. I do not create with my own ability, but with the gift God has given me.

31 responses »

  1. Well done, a though provoking piece. Keep up the good work Kx
    http://kashaw.wordpress.com/

  2. Jingle says:

    well put,
    need no another scar..

  3. You can feel the love for the other person and their desperation to help them through whatever it is they are going through in this piece. Lovely, just lovely.

  4. Jingle says:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/awards-from-the-blogging-universe/sweet-princess-award-4-female-community-members/#comment-18296

    awards for you.

    support us by linking in 1 to 3 poems to our poetry potluck…

    not necessarily related to the theme, any old poems would work.

  5. Powerful. You brought tears to my eyes. Well written!

  6. Bodhirose says:

    The pain here was intensely felt for a loved one whose choice of a path can destroy much more than themselves. So well done…

    http://bodhirose.wordpress.com/2010/09/26/tapping-into-the-source/

  7. Jingle says:

    Thanks for dropping the link in my post…
    have fun reading others…

    here is one of my entries:
    http://poetryalltheway.tumblr.com/post/1116122120/becoming-homeless

  8. My eyes are almost burning with tears too, very touching words and flow of poem, happy rally,my friend=)

  9. Shashi says:

    These battles must be fought… I agree.. and its a nice one rally.. enjoyed reading it.

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

  10. Artswebshow says:

    wow, this is some powerful poetry

  11. ladynimue says:

    I wonder how you are,
    I’m scared you’ll go too far.
    Please don’t let it win,
    You don’t need another scar.

    having lived these lines, i know the feeling well .. this was perfect !

  12. notjeffery says:

    I can’t explain what this piece did to me.
    I ran out of breath and am left in a stupor of wonder.
    Inspiring!

    Peace to you,

    http://notjeffery1.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/dying-inside/
    http://notjeffery1.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/forsooth/
    (my entries)

  13. megzone says:

    woww.. loved the poem…
    esp the repetition of closing eyes adds a certain rhythm to it 😀

    Im here from Jingle’s rally..
    you can read my poem at
    http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/10/07/autumn/

  14. 2zpoint says:

    I find comfort in your writing in knowing I’m not alone but sadness in the fact that another human being has to go through a similar experience. You write so descriptively and your emotion says it all. Beautiful piece Ms Elizibeth.

  15. the repetitions in between makes the read even more lovely.. thought provoking piece!

    My Rally Entry is Here!
    http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/night-nuances/

  16. I just got the chills…your words resonate with my insides!

    I look forward to reading more of your poetry!

    http://itslovelyannie.com/2010/10/06/different-rally-week-30/

  17. Lu Ann says:

    Wow, you really got me there. Right now Im feeling sad and anxious!!! “Please don’t cry.

    I stay awake for you.
    I pray all night for you.
    Please don’t give up,
    I wonder what you do”

    Simply amazing how you can take us there and feel both pains.

  18. PinkLady says:

    i love the way you wrote this piece! in fact, i felt how panic built up as you describe someone’s pain. you wish to help but there’s nothing else you can do.

    thanks for the nice comment you left on my post. 🙂

  19. The way you expressed is awesome.. Eyes shut in fear.. OMG.. This is too good..

    Fragrance of Friendship

    Happy Rally

    –Someone Is Special–

  20. Kiera says:

    Loved the rhyme scheme; this poem has an amazing rhythm. Wonderful work.

    🙂

  21. Panda Wolf says:

    This is my preferred rhyming scheme, as you would probably observe in my own poems.

    Here’s one: http://pandaheroes.wordpress.com/2010/10/09/ambivalence/

    Happy Rally!

  22. This one I could feel …well done!

  23. hindawy says:

    Wonderful as usual Robin 🙂

    Keep it up

    My entry for week 30

    http://hindawy.wordpress.com/2010/09/14/within-the-mind/

  24. Hey, let me tell you one truth. I really wanted my friends to tell me that, instead of offering me words of sympathy that only increased my feeling of self-pity. A million Thanks to you for writing this piece.
    you are surely my nomination for this week’s rally. please do check out:
    http://naba1987.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/the-heartbroke-song/

  25. Talon says:

    I have spent nights like these…heartbreaking and beautiful poem of loss.

  26. brian says:

    i felt your words deep…love the repititions as they drive this as well…

  27. painful love reflected through ur words … nicely done

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